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Firebox (FB)
This is a CRITIQUE forum...Stoking and smoking poetry critiques. This is not a forum for the faint-hearted. It is strongly advised that you first post a poem in the On Track forum to get input prior to posting it here.Posting Rules: You may post 1 piece each day but you must post one thoughtful and substantial reply to at least one other writer here before posting your own poem.

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Re: A Creation Story - Our Uni-verse Really like this Norm but I remember reading it or at least part of it before. Still, very much enjoyed re-reading and feeling again the spiritual closeness, no words needed of the time the two of sp... Started Nov 9^th, 2009 at 11:47am by Normpo	9	283	Nov 11^th, 2023 at 12:13pm By: Tinkerbell
Sir Real Note: Well, this one is going out to 11 publications in two weeks so maybe some of you will offer up whatever you can. My writing service loves it but I want more input. Thanks --- this is FIREBOX.<b... Started Nov 4^th, 2005 at 1:17am by Normpo	14	231	Nov 10^th, 2019 at 6:58pm By: Normpo
On Hearing ‘Songs and Dances of Death' - Four Sonnets Introductory Notes for “On Hearing ‘Songs and Dances of Death’": Circa 2012 These four sonnets were written upon hearing, in concert, Mussorgsky's "Songs and Dances of Death" written in 1875. ... Started Jan 28^th, 2018 at 3:09pm by Normpo	0	65	Jan 28^th, 2018 at 3:09pm By: Normpo
du fu “New ghosts complain and old ghosts weep, under the lowering sky their voices cry out in the rain.” (du fu) He listened for the murmur of approaching invaders above... Started Jan 5^th, 2014 at 5:54pm by R.C James	4	99	Feb 8^th, 2016 at 1:43am By: dericlee
The Kitten ‘Meow,’ ‘Meow,’ calls the kitten. There he is at the door, looking up at me endearingly imploring for a meal which I promptly fetch from the kitchen. He runs to his favorite pla... Started Aug 23^rd, 2015 at 5:43am by sunilmathur	2	73	Aug 30^th, 2015 at 2:59am By: sunilmathur
Himalayan Clouds (revised) Revision The view is one of rare and ineffable beauty as our plane passes over the Himalayas. Mountains, enveloped in dense forests embroidered with meandering rivers and streams<b... Started Aug 6^th, 2015 at 9:38am by sunilmathur	2	120	Aug 9^th, 2015 at 6:25am By: sunilmathur
Poet I cast my net of words into the mists of time, try to capture imaginations searching for a place to nest. I cannot pull in the net, gain no bounty from the casting, but the ... Started Aug 2^nd, 2015 at 12:39pm by Rick	2	89	Aug 9^th, 2015 at 6:02am By: nas
Aletheia Behold, humanity hath cast away its youth in my desire and seeketh yet my hand, even unto the grave. I, Aletheia, a virgin am and virgin shall remain ‘til time be done<br... Started Jan 9^th, 2012 at 8:23pm by Thoth	5	167	Aug 2^nd, 2015 at 1:10pm By: Rick
Sunday Night Roast Sunday Night Roast - February, 2003 by Carly Svamvour Parts of what once was a grazing animal have been cooled and covered with some slightly un-handy wrap. Windows shu... Started Mar 28^th, 2012 at 11:14am by WildCityWoman	4	108	Aug 2^nd, 2015 at 12:55pm By: Rick
Foundations of my love Soft is the foundation of my love for you Not soft like the body of a worm But rather as the warm summer breeze Gently caressing your skin Light is the foundation of my love for yo... Started Aug 2^nd, 2015 at 11:36am by Rick	0	48	Aug 2^nd, 2015 at 11:36am By: Rick
Draped Model - REVISED 03-18 - Name Change Also REVISED: Thank you all for your input and encouragement to make this better. Feelings Draped in the Artist's Studio His studio is where his love abides Through hidden visits, he makes ... Started Mar 13^th, 2007 at 1:14am by Normpo « Pages 1 2 3 »	34	446	Jun 6^th, 2015 at 1:13pm By: Normpo
A Hundred Times a Night. . . I say I love you silently you do not hear I design it that way. The hood light above the stove is soft through the open bedroom door, red kitchen c... Started May 25^th, 2013 at 2:50am by duetsdove	5	208	Jan 5^th, 2014 at 5:52pm By: R.C James
Whispers From the Fence Whispers From the Fence In spring blades of grass struggle to rise while daisies whisper from fences, pondering possibilities, speak of days when their blooms lasted <br /... Started Mar 30^th, 2012 at 3:53pm by WildCityWoman	3	97	Jun 5^th, 2013 at 11:12pm By: duetsdove
Traces (revision3) Traces A fervency, close to alchemy, purified us; recall the sequence, moment to moment, the pauses , the lapses, air traced as you defined voluptuous. Passionate miners, we d... Started Feb 19^th, 2013 at 12:20pm by R.C James	2	117	Jun 5^th, 2013 at 11:01pm By: duetsdove
Mishegas (revision 2) Generations orbit each other as they descend the worn wooden staircase; individuals then are scattered to isolated, barbarous, destinations. <br /... Started Jan 25^th, 2013 at 11:14pm by R.C James	4	120	Jan 29^th, 2013 at 3:30pm By: nas
Miles Davis Stepping outside life’s vanilla key signature time after time kind of jazz kind of blue finding ways to play notes that weren’t always there His horn<br ... Started Dec 15^th, 2011 at 4:15am by Brian	9	185	Jan 25^th, 2013 at 11:10pm By: R.C James
poetry temporal incarnation of Aphrodite natural temptation found command from divine dada disobeyed earthbound Olympian of love now dwells amidst mossy glade in which human guise she d... Started Apr 25^th, 2012 at 4:59am by belmont hills bard	1	84	Apr 25^th, 2012 at 1:03pm By: Normpo
Lions Playing on the Beach Lions Playing on the Beach For three long days we played our fateful game with hunter and the hunted trading roles. Our aim, the price of victory we’d claim to satisfy the nature o... Started Feb 12^th, 2012 at 2:53am by Terence	7	155	Mar 28^th, 2012 at 11:24am By: WildCityWoman
Inspired For Anne and Peter . . . In that room at the top silhouettes come together the shapes of their faces like pieces of a puzzle One could push them together get the satisfac... Started Mar 25^th, 2012 at 11:18am by WildCityWoman	0	67	Mar 25^th, 2012 at 11:18am By: WildCityWoman
Origin of Specious Origin of Specious Charles Robert Darwin Married his first cousin. The origin for his affection Was influenced by means of unnatural selection. Started Feb 24^th, 2012 at 4:46am by Terence	6	142	Mar 25^th, 2012 at 11:16am By: WildCityWoman
Himalayan Clouds Revision The weather was wet and cloudy; and as the plane took off from Kathmandu, the majestic Himalayas were seen below covered with thick, green forests, interspersed with ... Started Jan 6^th, 2012 at 6:13pm by sunilmathur	13	160	Mar 25^th, 2012 at 10:41am By: WildCityWoman
** Casualities of War Images assail with a speedy snap rat-tat-tat bone gray skeletal remains, standing, still, stark and oppressive, their rage rallied and bent against the vastness of a bruise... Started Apr 28^th, 2009 at 5:33pm by peach	8	116	Jan 10^th, 2012 at 2:53pm By: peach
** turnabout-- His hand reaches for her in the dark, the tight and punishing knot travels thick and hard expectant of something slick slack and yielding, In a battle of flesh, heavy ha... Started May 15^th, 2009 at 5:53pm by peach	4	179	Jan 9^th, 2012 at 8:17pm By: Thoth
** Declaration An urgent message shouts from her eyes, violently violet, two shades darker than mine the delicate swell of a once pale cheek, bruised to distortion, Clothing and hair, out of pla... Started May 7^th, 2009 at 9:42am by peach	3	158	Oct 30^th, 2011 at 9:41pm By: peach
Vincent's Night Vincent's Night inspiration screams through tangled neurons passionately exploding in brilliant torrents of dance on the blue-black canvas of the mind. whirling, twirling... Started Oct 6^th, 2011 at 8:48pm by Terence	6	110	Oct 30^th, 2011 at 7:48pm By: Terence

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