Some suggestions;

His hand reaches for her in the dark,
the tight and punishing knot [not req]
travels thick and hard
expectant of something slick
slack and yielding, 

In a battle of flesh,
heavy handed blows
strike. strong, so that Eyes roll,[redundancy]
and sight leaves the senses.
For a time, sound
becomes muffled, distanced. 
as if, from far off,

The mind slowly to wake,
wakes, dizzy with worry.
questions [probing for] the right choice of words,
the proper tone, to use.
The risk for error becomesing more dangerous,
as thewith each occurences of begging 
pleading and running.

Running out of time,
the time to change,
to take, the upper hand,
growsing shorter, by the day.

Good work on a tricky subject!

peach wrote on May 15^th, 2009 at 5:53pm:

His hand reaches for her in the dark,
the tight and punishing knot
travels thick and hard
expectant of something slick
slack and yielding, 

In a battle of flesh,
heavy handed blows
strike strong, so that eyes roll,
and sight leaves the senses,
for a time, sound
heard muffled 
as if, from far off,

The mind slow to wake,
wakes dizzy with worry,
questions the right choice of words,
the proper tone, to use
the risk for error becoming more dangerous,
as the occurences of begging 
pleading and running,

Running out of time,
the time to change,
to take, the upper hand,
growing shorter, by the day.