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Firebox (FB)
This is a CRITIQUE forum...Stoking and smoking poetry critiques. This is not a forum for the faint-hearted. It is strongly advised that you first post a poem in the On Track forum to get input prior to posting it here.Posting Rules: You may post 1 piece each day but you must post one thoughtful and substantial reply to at least one other writer here before posting your own poem.

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** A Gentle Kill A cat crouches tight around its kill, paws, sticky with bits, the inedible remnants of locust, the flick of its tail, snaps in warning, eyes shoot flares, staving interference<br... Started Dec 13^th, 2009 at 5:57pm by peach	3	103	May 21^st, 2011 at 1:11am By: peach
** To say it never happened... 1942-1945 To say it never happened-- Treblinka, Auschwitz-Birkenau, Dachau... To call it a hoax-- Chelmno, Sobibor, Belzek, Majdanek... To ignore the calculated, syste... Started Jun 23^rd, 2009 at 11:14pm by peach « Pages 1 2 »	16	251	May 21^st, 2011 at 2:55pm By: peach
** Whether We Go a secret language speaks through the eye of a mirror, the silver surfactant that draws one in to bathe in their own reflection, self absorption as a rip tide, <br /... Started Jul 11^th, 2009 at 2:52am by peach	6	102	May 14^th, 2011 at 3:53am By: peach
** Entry We mortals push at life with the shove-rush-slide of a tidal wave, the surge-burst-arrival, on a scene, both propellant and astounding,. No two of us alike, uniqu... Started Jun 12^th, 2010 at 6:18pm by peach	5	201	May 17^th, 2011 at 5:44pm By: peach
** Poor Psittacines Beautiful, rain forest being winged vibrant worth taking a chance Intruders trespass, disguised hunt a covetted prize, A palm tree falls fledglings pil... Started Apr 13^th, 2010 at 8:14am by peach	8	148	May 17^th, 2011 at 9:21am By: peach
Innocent Eyes I know I will get beaten up on the punctuation it is not my strongest area. Psalm 113:9 He settles the barren woman in her home as a happy mother of children. Innocent Eyes Innocent eyes survey the world, ... Started May 3^rd, 2008 at 9:46pm by Daldoggy	6	52	May 14^th, 2008 at 1:02am By: Daldoggy
"...all my troubles seemed so far away." (reworked) Okay, I think this thing is ready for a shredding. Don't be gentle...but if cussing offends you, be warned and please don't enter. "So, tell me about your day." This shrink never has a n... You wa Started Apr 29^th, 2011 at 5:45pm by dericlee	4	66	May 17^th, 2011 at 10:21am By: peach
'The wind does not die in Autumn" or Yolo By-pass Spent flower stalks, sedges still green like place settings held by feathery hands. Water still, then brushed with chaos patterned and folded an endless mirror of rushes and ... Started Sep 21^st, 2009 at 12:38pm by josephfinkleman	6	51	Dec 17^th, 2009 at 2:57am By: peach
(Edited II-) Quickly... (Edit II) Quickly... pleading answers for my whys, "No life for me?" Then I, just as quickly, ponder, "What provides, before I die, memory's peace?" What snapshots, save... Started Feb 28^th, 2009 at 10:38am by acricket « Pages 1 2 »	15	106	May 18^th, 2009 at 4:28am By: peach
(Not quite) last words of a cowboy... (newly revised) Revision, (courtesy of Wilson) (Not quite) last words of a cowboy... "Hello Lord. Yes, it's me. No, we ain't spoke in several years. That'd be my fault; I've always known that you got ... ****** John's mare came in without him in the saddle Thursday night and wouldn't let nobody touch Started Nov 8^th, 2005 at 3:22am by dericlee	12	71	Nov 10^th, 2005 at 5:41pm By: dericlee
** 'til death The consequence of some good-byes, is the time taken for one last look, Evil intentions not always plain, not every play goes by the book Life, well known to be a gamble The g... Started Dec 19^th, 2009 at 8:33am by peach	4	6	Feb 4^th, 2010 at 6:10pm By: Tzarsun
** A little, enough Not a moment that we spend too thin, too short for us, to connect, for me to stroke the lips of your boyish grin, smooth your tousled hair, melt inside eyes that waltz <b... Started Jan 13^th, 2011 at 7:09pm by peach	1	15	May 13^th, 2011 at 2:35am By: peach
** Afterthought The years telling on her face, every dimpled crag the place she's recorded every minute of her life, Lately bewilderment factors in, her brows knit in puzzlement,<br ... Started Jan 27^th, 2010 at 5:32am by peach	6	135	Nov 6^th, 2010 at 9:33am By: peach
** As Is An inestimable loss taken into account, the stumbling block-hard-knock, high-hurdle-obstacle, the tripped up, fall down, red-face humiliation, a hard lesson-<br... Started Jan 11^th, 2011 at 9:41pm by peach	3	21	Feb 25^th, 2011 at 3:57am By: peach
** Aspiring Touch me with the wand of sensitivity grace my words so they may transfer electric as current, help me express the sting of heartbreak so like pain the expectation, a wound or pool... Started Nov 16^th, 2010 at 6:25pm by peach	4	119	May 13^th, 2011 at 5:57pm By: peach
** Coupling My skin prickles transparent with yearning, the scent of citrus mingled with smoky spice induces a steamy headiness, that pulls me in, the tilt of the tumbler a... Started Aug 14^th, 2010 at 12:13am by peach	4	141	May 17^th, 2011 at 4:30pm By: peach
** Declaration An urgent message shouts from her eyes, violently violet, two shades darker than mine the delicate swell of a once pale cheek, bruised to distortion, Clothing and hair, out of pla... Started May 7^th, 2009 at 9:42am by peach	3	168	Oct 30^th, 2011 at 9:41pm By: peach
** Denial Insulated by the prideful, willful choice, to live as a hermit, attain a heightened purity, in a self-imposed detachment, an immersement in personal struggle, riddl... Started Jan 23^rd, 2010 at 11:03pm by peach	4	166	May 13^th, 2011 at 3:51am By: peach
** emote ... Having wept at the calm of a smooth china sea, shivered at the fracas of a steel-hard storm. witnessed a sky of brilliant sapphire blue, capsize to the grotesqueness of ... Started Nov 27^th, 2010 at 10:54pm by peach	7	149	Dec 5^th, 2010 at 5:44pm By: nas
** Faithless Betrayal burns with the ferocity of acid, it seethes through skin with the audacity of a thousand red-hot daggers, clots blood in the veins, splitting the heart wide open. Ma... Started Jan 4^th, 2010 at 11:06am by peach	6	27	May 17^th, 2011 at 12:30am By: peach
** Hail- Hail hurls to the ground, frozen, suicidal unbound white weight that plummets down to earth, physical images that hurt, like some of the choices we make, made ... Started Sep 13^th, 2010 at 6:18pm by peach	8	129	May 17^th, 2011 at 4:54pm By: peach
** handiwork Encased in earth, as something sacred and secure compressed by pounds of pressure and eons of time, slabs of rock command metamorphosis. recovered, tooled, traveled ... Started Jan 31^st, 2010 at 7:02pm by peach	10	274	May 17^th, 2011 at 5:54am By: peach
** Ideal Here, I stand a faded shredded image, a shadow of someone, I only vaguely remember, finally everything you ever wanted Started Nov 17^th, 2010 at 11:20pm by peach	6	79	May 13^th, 2011 at 8:59pm By: peach
** Leaving She locks the door, jams her keys back through the mail slot- the metallic-thwack-smack to the floor, her final act of extraction, Blunt as punctuation, the flat of he... Started Apr 5^th, 2010 at 10:23am by peach	5	179	May 17^th, 2011 at 9:43am By: peach
** Mother's Day She sits like this for hours, statue still perched at the edge of her bed, from the doorway the curve of her cheek, immersed in shadow, Across the room th... Started May 8^th, 2009 at 2:26pm by peach	4	152	Nov 3^rd, 2011 at 6:04am By: peach

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