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Reply #2 - Aug 9th, 2015 at 6:02am
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I like casting my net of words trying to capture imaginations.  Mists of time is rather cliched so maybe time's mists.  However, mists of time implies the past and you are casting your words into the present.

Verse two, I would say "the need to hunt"  attempt feels superfluous.

  
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Reply #1 - Aug 6th, 2015 at 9:27am
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The first two lines of the poem very vividly capture the essence of poetry--the poet sending out his thoughts into the world in the hope of capturing people's imagination and evoking an empathetic response. The third stanza, in its initial two lines, seems to repeat the idea already expressed in the last two lines of the second stanza. Instead of "Any chance to connect with empathic souls is all consuming", it would perhaps be more appropriate to say: "The need (or desire) to connect...is all consuming". This again would involve a repetition of words already used in the preceding two lines.
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Aug 2nd, 2015 at 12:39pm
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I cast my net of words into the mists of time,
try to capture imaginations 
searching for a place to nest.

I cannot pull in the net, 
gain no bounty from the casting,
but the need to attempt the hunt 
is embedded within me.

Any chance to connect with 
empathic souls is all consuming.
I cast my net of words into the mists of time.
  
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