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Reply #3 - Jun 16th, 2013 at 10:43am
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Sounds good.  Thanks again Daniel.
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Re: Haiku
Reply #2 - May 15th, 2013 at 12:41am
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davidf wrote on Apr 28th, 2013 at 10:03pm:
crickets chirping
don't know when to stop
insomnia again


I love this impression, David!  

Your last line may be just a mite long, however.  Could I also toy with turning around your first line, so that you both solve grammar problems and switch attention from the action of the crickets to the crickets themselves?

Maybe something like this:

chirping crickets
don't know when to stop;
more insomnia

deLighting in your observation, Daniel  Cool
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Reply #1 - May 3rd, 2013 at 1:23pm
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Annoying and keep you awake.  Good one.
  
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Apr 28th, 2013 at 10:03pm
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crickets chirping
don't know when to stop
insomnia again


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