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davidf Supreme Member Offline I love YaBB 1G - SP1! Posts: 1158 Joined: Oct 25^th, 2007	Re: From my island poems ... Reply #5 - Mar 19^th, 2013 at 6:39am	Print Post
	WildCityWoman (Carly), You have crtainly painted a loovely picture with your words. ~Davidf


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Terry Gold Star Member Offline I love YaBB 1G - SP1! Posts: 628 Location: OR Joined: Feb 14^th, 2007	Re: From my island poems ... Reply #4 - May 10^th, 2012 at 12:53am	Print Post
	Provokes the imagination...a faire like quality to it. Enjoyed, this vist to the forrest. Terry


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Just_Daniel Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8989 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Re: From my island poems ... Reply #3 - Apr 11^th, 2012 at 1:01pm	Print Post
	WildCityWoman wrote on Mar 25^th, 2012 at 11:37am: Cinquain as the afternoon grows in on itself, blue smoke from old fire rises, blends into the sky It's a lovely picture, Carly! Remember to try to make EACH LINE in a cinquain be semi-self-sufficient so that there is not an immediate need for the next line as it adds a distinct piece to your picture. Maybe something like this? brisk, cool afternoon grows in on itself ~ blue smoke rises from old fire, diffusing dusk sky It's super to see you active here, my friend. Sorry that I've been away. Only so many hours in the day, you know!! deLightingly, Daniel
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WildCityWoman Topic Starter Supreme Member Offline Yeah - me again! Still rockin'! Posts: 4415 Location: Toronto, Canada Joined: Sep 19^th, 2003	Re: From my island poems ... Reply #2 - Mar 28^th, 2012 at 11:28am	Print Post
	Thanks, Naz - of course, that's why I said 'blends', isn't it? The blue smoke would disappear in the blue sky. Hmmm ... gotta' think about that now.


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nas Supreme Member Offline I love YaBB 1G - SP1! Posts: 9444 Joined: Sep 11^th, 2006	Re: From my island poems ... Reply #1 - Mar 28^th, 2012 at 5:41am	Print Post
	lovely description of the end of the day and the blue smoke the same colour as the sky.


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WildCityWoman Topic Starter Supreme Member Offline Yeah - me again! Still rockin'! Posts: 4415 Location: Toronto, Canada Joined: Sep 19^th, 2003	From my island poems ... Mar 25^th, 2012 at 11:37am	Print Post
	Cinquain as the afternoon grows in on itself, blue smoke from old fire rises, blends into the sky


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