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Re: Once a Pawn....a Queen
Reply #5 - Nov 14th, 2019 at 11:28pm
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Daniel -- the graphic (a PNG or JPG file) needs to be somewhere on the Internet so you put in the URL within your post. If you email me the jpeg or png you want "available" I'll "store it" for you at poemtrain.com and I'll give you the link (URL) you can include in your post.  I'll do this for or any others that may not have the means to store files on the Internet where they can be accessed.  Let me know.
  
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Reply #4 - Nov 2nd, 2019 at 3:28pm
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Thank you so much, Norm
  
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Reply #3 - Nov 2nd, 2019 at 2:09pm
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I'm not too sure how to get the graphic in-between?  I might try it in a "play" thread to experiment. I think you accomplished unique ways to amplify your message -- the visual, of course -- but also the dynamic of achieving much more by traversing a space (in life) and elevating how you feel (going from pawn to queen). Clever, witty and insightful -- still the same Daniel I've known for over 20 years!  --smile--
  
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Re: Once a Pawn....a Queen
Reply #2 - Nov 2nd, 2019 at 4:37am
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You are spot on with each of your observations, Norm.  The three lines beneath the piece are a further observation, and they are the only rhyming lines to emphasize the distinction.  I meant this to be a here-and-now, and I really wanted to emphasize the pawn-becomes-queen by placing the image (which is attached at the end of the poem) between the title and the poem itself, but I couldn't figure out how to do that on this site -- or if it CAN be ?

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Reply #1 - Nov 1st, 2019 at 10:06pm
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Well done! I wonder if they still call this a "concrete" poem where the poem's shape reflects the message/meaning? Also, I'm not sure if the three long dashed lines at the bottom are a part of the base of the chess piece or if the intent is to imply there's more beneath the actual piece than meets the eye? I also loved how you used all those participles (and you used the present participle "ING" not the past participle "ED" to emphasize, I think, that this is here-and-now and not just what "was?)" 

Not sure if THIS is your intent also, but the rules of chess "allow" the pawn to become a queen if it successfully traverses to the opposite end of the chess board, yes?

This was quite a beautiful way to express love and admiration. Enjoyed by this reader.

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Once a Pawn....a Queen
Nov 1st, 2019 at 9:00pm
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Once a Pawn. . . . a Queen

Joy
She is a gift
a special creation
of a God Who cares
She is my friend
my love
~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~
Sunshine from a face
shaded only by a sadness
from a precious heart stirred
with grieving and passion
remembering and dreams
enduring and embraces
interacting and flight
cooking and songs
working and play
birthing and mirth
mother and sisterhood
~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~
O, such depth of majesty
in a visage of tenderness
eyes of understanding
cheeks with warmth
lips of sweetness
chin of dignity
neck of grace
arms of strength
breasts of nurturing
shoulders enveloping love
hands of matchless creativity
fingers touching ever sensitively



Once a pawn was all I’d seen
painful struggles in between
quietly she stands a Queen



© MLee Dickens'son (Daniel J Ricketts)
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