Bumped up from 2008.

Hi Daniel I love the fact that with all of this you still try.
Chana

Daniel,

The cadence of this write is very nicely done.  I could have read on, once it took over, and it feels like it could be built upon.

Lin

nas wrote on Oct 20^th, 2008 at 9:58pm:

Thanks so much for your confidence in my pen, N.  I wish I possessed it in my own hand and brain.  And I certainly will keep trying.

Probably the HARDEST thing for me in the production of free verse now is my own inability to point out good or inadequate communication in OTHERS' writings.  I read it sometimes and just draw a blank... sometimes as to interpretation of it and other times in 'feeling' something amiss but not being able to put my finger on it...

but even MORE times in seeing such a huge array of OTHER ways of saying something (that are NOT there with structured verse) that my mind just runs away and refuses to cooperate with me.  So there I sit, wanting to post a piece in the crit forum, but find myself unable to crit free verse!

sLightly astir, Daniel  

P.S.  Note: I wrote this piece as my part in a challenge to write a poem about a few 'impossible' things... so these are what came to mind.

impossible

to write
verse freely
without sounding
trite or stiff or foolish
saying anything 
that's worth a nickel
plugged or otherwise

to beat depression 
back
for long enough
to make a difference
in me or anyone
I dare to touch
or try

to ever catch
a glimpse beneath the piles
of paperwork
deciphering the code
of notes to me
too quickly scrawled

to write haiku
not shunned or spurned
by better-read haijin
of crystal eye
without the cloud
of age and blurring tears

impossible...

but still I try.