The second draft works much better and is clearer.

Hi Holly,

Thanks for your comments.

Stones cannot cry, but they will weep.   
Rocks don’t have a mouth, but they’ll speak  

These lines are metaphors for something that doesn't seem likely to change, but then does. 

In this case, a person who wants to speak passionately but is afraid to. His lover puts pressure on him and he responds in away that alienates her. But of course that is opposite of what he wants and so makes a vow to change.

The gardening and tectonic plates imagery was accidental. I just go lucky. I was going for images that have to do with moving earth. The wheelbarrow, tunneling, filling pails, bringing a field to blossom represents a directed flow of energy. Tectonic plates and fault-line heart are images of forces of nature.

This poem was supposed to be a richtameter, but I messed up by omitting the ten syllable line. Also the first two syllable and last two syllable lines should match and of course the poem deviates from that. If you think this structure would make the poem stronger, I'd get my richtameter in shape for the next draft.

Regards,
Chaim

Hi Nas,

Thanks for your comments.  For sure you are not dense. The poem for the most part is written as a richtometer. There maybe an extra syllable here and there.
I have a fondness for this structure, but maybe it doesn't work with this poem.

Barrow is short for wheelbarrow.

The last four lines are problematic. Maybe I'll end the poem with "I will bring a field of poesies to blossom."

What is thistle turf? It was a just a cute name for man of the earth. Turf another word for earth and thistle as in thistle.

Thanks again,
Chaim