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Reply #7 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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You're welcome. . .happy to have taken part in the sharing.

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Reply #6 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Good morning Ren,

You have filled my cup to overflow.  I shall let it twinkle in sunshine for a few days before taking a draught.

Your elaborate consideration is appreciated.

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Reply #5 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Just playing below Don. . .some of it may fit with what your intent was. . .if so, it's yours. . .and if not scrap my wanderings.  *smile*  I've extended the syllable count to 8. . .still keeps it compact but even those two extra syllables per line. . .can work a bit more in. . .


Full moonlight piques warm affection
when starlight's twinkle dims our sight
and sunlight stares -- no reflection. 
 
She's Artemis awash with light 
when stellar shine is not enough, 
and Apollo’s glare's lost his height. 
 
By morn, her dewdrop jewels gleam 
like sprinkled stars that fell to earth 
arrayed for dawn and sun’s first beam. 

And. . .yes. . .at one point in Homer's view of Apollo he was a "bringer of plagues". . .however. . .he was also the god invoked to remove the plague. . .and. . .over time because equated to Paen (the doctor god) and thus the two converged into one more mightier Apollo. . .known forevermore as the God of Healing.

Artemis (as often gods and goddesses have different names or become linked as one and the same with another) has been equated to Hecate -- a dark goddess, therefore, her affiliation with the dark side of the moon as well as the Light side. . .that she took from Selene. . .who was the moon goddess most receognized before Artemis somewhat replaced her.

Enjoying the interaction. . .thanks.

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Reply #4 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Hi Ren,

I was ignorant of Artemis being the dark side of the moon.  I am aware that Apollo and Artemis are siblings and that they twin our daily twenty-four hours.   

I simplistically employed identity of Artemis as moon and Apollo as sun to dip a tad deep and supply substitutes for avoid repetition.   

Apollo fits human stature preference for being the brightest. We choose the tallest, largest, highest, smartest, etc. with bias not fully understood.  We allow the moon to be more romantic than the sun, which indicates we do not consider Apollo best for everything. Isn't Apollo also a bad guy as the dispenser of sickness?

I was using the Goldilocks taste test in that experience with sunlight is overpowering bright, experience with starlight being unsatisfactorily dim, and moonlight being the most satisfying choice of the three.

You are the second to object to the choice of affright, which I admit is glaringly rhyme driven.

Help pry me away from my bent to write:
Apollo’s glare is. . . . 


Don


  
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Reply #3 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Every heroin must have an antihero, which is Apollo in this case.  Their playing field stage is the thinly veiled stars.

I find the above interesting. . .curious as to your consideration of Apollo as antihero.  Apollo is the twin brother of Artemis (according to myth) and was considered the God of Light and Truth, the Healer God.  It has been said that while all that exists has its light and its dark sides. . .Apollo's dark side was hardly visible. . .while Artemis, on the other hand, showed her dark side, and the contrast of it against her light much more than Apollo.

She is three in one -- the Light of the Moon, the Huntress on earth, and a goddess of the underworld, as well as the dark side of the Moon. . .we can never forget the dark side of the moon.  *smile*

We sometimes come to light through darkness. . .too true. . .yet I would imagine their playing field to be more equal. . .and if either has the shadowed hand visible. . .it would be Artemis.

Just sharing a few thoughts. . .unasked for I realize. . .lolol. . .but I love mythological discussion.

~Ren~

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Reply #2 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Hi Rene,

Thanks for the valuable analysis.  Your points are well taken and will be seriously considered.

My hope was the link that symbolic lunar light is ideal due to being goddess Artemis.

Every heroin must have an antihero, which is Apollo in this case.  Their playing field stage is the thinly veiled stars.

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Reply #1 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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I like the play, the entanglement if you will, between Artemis and Apollo. . .lunar and solar. . .twinned.

It's not quite clear if you are wishing to personify the moon as Artemis, as she's associated with the moon. . .or if you wish to show Artemis side-by-side with her lunar aspects.

Affright's not cutting it for me. . .the feel is that you were looking for a word to rhyme. . .but should you wish to keep it. . .I don't think you need a double possessive. . .or the contraction of glare is.

Apollo's glare affright

As personification of the moon. . .the dewdrop jewels fit. . .it still seems a little confused. . .or maybe it's just that I personally would like to see Artemis as goddess played against her lunar aspects. . .

Anything mythological always piques my interest.  *smile*

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Lunar Light
Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Lunar Light

Full moonlight glows just right
when starlight twinkles dim
and sunlight stares too bright.

Artemis strolls at night
when starlight is too thin,
Apollo’s glare’s affright.

Her dewdrop jewels gleam
like sprinkled stars on earth
arrayed for sun’s first beam.


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