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ace Gold Star Member Offline I love YaBB 1G - SP1! Posts: 536 Location: Aurora, Colorado Joined: Aug 5^th, 2003	Re: For All the Dogs in China Reply #3 - Nov 15^th, 2006 at 11:15pm	Print Post
	Cyn: For what it's worth I like the double-rhyme aspect of "skinned" and "sin"; I'd keep it. Incidently, while the poem is certainly true for parts of China; however, of late, many Chinese are taking dogs for pets, in keeping with their new status. I think the Chinese Government is now opposed to canicide. Just a note. ace


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alanmdouglas Gold Star Member Offline Posts: 672 Location: UK Joined: Jul 31^st, 2003	Re: For All the Dogs in China Reply #2 - Nov 15^th, 2006 at 7:19pm	Print Post
	Dear Cyn, Perhaps fault instead of sin ? Love Alan


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deathraider Full Member Offline Posts: 34 Joined: Feb 7^th, 2006	Re: For All the Dogs in China Reply #1 - Nov 13^th, 2006 at 8:11am	Print Post
	The word sin sort of sours the serene horror of the poem, in my opinion. It don't know how to back what I'm saying up, though, but it just doesn't work for me. The rest of the poem is right on, though. It evokes much sympathy for our canine counterparts...
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Cyn Topic Starter Gold Star Member Offline Posts: 789 Joined: Jan 30^th, 2006	For All the Dogs in China Nov 13^th, 2006 at 8:00am	Print Post
	For All the Dogs in China On the dingy streets of Jingling they sell our carcasses. In Beijing, in Tianjin, we’re stolen from our homes along with those that paced and roamed the alleyways, afraid, alone, some skinned before our pulse had quit. Our only sin: that we exist - with no idea we’d come to this, not worth a wag ... or wet-nosed kiss.
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