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Re: Burned Forest
Reply #2 - Jul 28th, 2020 at 2:18pm
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Thanks for the response Daniel.  Yes, the psychological, social, political and the "devastation" that is tearing down the fabric of our "forest." When the original poem was written (I'll highlight the lines that were written by this 16 year old kid (me), I was only speaking of a real forest fire (no metaphor intended). But today, "metaphored" it so the reader can associate it to his/her feelings and experiences.

Oh, one more thing -- rather than a period or exclamation point, the poem ends with a comma  --smile--
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Re: Burned Forest
Reply #1 - Jul 24th, 2020 at 7:13pm
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Well, this seems very current, Norm.  Not sure what metaphors you might be referring to, but I think you know metaphors are my poetic weakness.  I've never grasped them very well. I'm certainly thinking a lot about the masking of COVID, though... and the devastation of all the closed businesses and schools... an the lost jobs... and perhaps the coming loss of hope.

It's a new (and old) kind of mass devastation.

deLighting to still be hanging in there, Daniel  Cool
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Burned Forest
Jul 24th, 2020 at 1:53pm
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Note: Revisited this 60 year old poem --- let your own mind use the current day metaphor that works for YOU today

burned forest

gone the forest scent, 
the crisp innocent 
air of cedars, lofty pines, scorched earth discontent

gone the forest sounds
above, upon resonant grounds
the quieting of whispered winds, silenced, loudly now profound

there’s no leaf-dappled trail,
no witness to the tale
no wild deer’s timid tracks…human nature failed

there is no birdsong on the air
no place for a squirrel to hide
there's only the ache of ashes
where a little world has died,


© Norman S. Pollack  re-edited 7/23/2020
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