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chanafrumin Full Member Offline I Love Cafe Poetica! Posts: 267 Joined: Apr 6^th, 2008	Re: Foolish Truth Reply #6 - May 3^rd, 2012 at 8:03pm	Print Post
	I loved the meaning and the poetry tempo. I feel moved by it as well Chana


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WildCityWoman Supreme Member Offline Yeah - me again! Still rockin'! Posts: 4415 Location: Toronto, Canada Joined: Sep 19^th, 2003	Re: Foolish Truth Reply #5 - Mar 25^th, 2012 at 10:19am	Print Post
	A fool hast little reason to prevaricate or resort to puffery. So if It be my wont to soar with crows than strut with peacocks, do I MY suggestion ... A fool hast little reason to prevaricate or resort to puffery. So if It be my wont to soar with crows than strut with peacocks, do I That's all I can think of - good thoughts here, Terrance.


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Terence Topic Starter Gold Star Member Offline in an English country garden ... Posts: 900 Joined: Mar 15^th, 2006	Re: Foolish Truth Reply #4 - Mar 10^th, 2012 at 7:41pm	Print Post
	Thanks, Norm. I guess "geese" is a more appropriate characterization.


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Normpo Forum Administrator Offline Posts: 10839 Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Re: Foolish Truth Reply #3 - Mar 10^th, 2012 at 4:05pm	Print Post
	I always like the poetic device known as "allusion" so your tail-gating on the back of Poe was quite nice. I would have actually titled the poem "Great Faith in Fools." to solidify the reference?? I like how nas articulated what is probably at the heart of this short poem -- "One feels menacing and the other vain." Enjoyed this -- not much to criticize. Norm
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Terence Topic Starter Gold Star Member Offline in an English country garden ... Posts: 900 Joined: Mar 15^th, 2006	Re: Foolish Truth Reply #2 - Mar 10^th, 2012 at 12:35am	Print Post
	Hi nas, I used "crows" as a personification of openness - wysiwyg. There is likely a better alternative. "wont" has a number of meanings, including habit or regular practice. I would prefer that the first verse sounded like the second but was stuck for words. Any suggestions would be appreciated.


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nas Supreme Member Offline I love YaBB 1G - SP1! Posts: 9444 Joined: Sep 11^th, 2006	Re: Foolish Truth Reply #1 - Mar 9^th, 2012 at 7:43am	Print Post
	Interesting choice to fly with crows or strut with peacocks. One feels menacing and the other vain. Part of me wants to say to the narrator, not to trust the crows and keep your secrets to yourself. You might fly with them but they are out for themselves. The first verse feels more modern than thesecond and I wondered why you chose older language in the second. Should it be "want" rather than "wont"?


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Terence Topic Starter Gold Star Member Offline in an English country garden ... Posts: 900 Joined: Mar 15^th, 2006	Foolish Truth Mar 6^th, 2012 at 5:25pm	Print Post
	Foolish Truth I have great faith in fools; self-confidence my friends call it. * But, in truth, I have the utmost trust in them, my dear friends. Is it not they in whom I confide my darkest secrets? Should I Depend upon myself for truth, or one who just pretends? A fool hast little reason to prevaricate or resort to puffery. So if It be my wont to soar with crows than strut with peacocks, do I Not then achieve a higher elevation than my temporal brethren? No!--my friends--tis not a madness deep inside that tells me I can fly. * Quote by Edgar Allan Poe
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