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Reply #4 - Oct 30th, 2011 at 5:30pm
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THX so much david!
  
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Reply #3 - Oct 30th, 2011 at 5:12pm
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peach,
I didn't get that impression the 1st time, but after you wrote that I re-read it and yes, it does seem stalkerish to me.  A good, creepy write, great now that Halloween is approaching...
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Reply #2 - Oct 23rd, 2011 at 6:19pm
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this was meant to imitate a stalker-like personality...
  
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Reply #1 - Apr 16th, 2010 at 2:43pm
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A very emotive poem, peach. Some may like it shorter but I believe the repetition gives it a cohesive strength. Enjoyed the wordplay.

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Apr 15th, 2010 at 9:04am
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You do not listen for my voice,
you have never heard it sing, 
the sweet melody of emotion,
beyond anything,

Close-up or from a distance,
it rocks me to my core,
the croon that masks the keening,
I hardly hear any more.

The song of the used up,
broken and ripped apart
the lament of the lonely
the bleat of an aching heart,

It starts every morning
lasts throughout each day,
I wish that I could tell you
but would you notice anyway?

You do not listen for my voice
you will never hear it sing
the cacophony of yearning  
beyond anything,

Beautiful but secret, 
my true and dearest one,
the one who starts me humming
thrumming inside the thrum 

The sound you will never hear 
as I watch, you pass me by,
every single, hundredth time,
I wish that you would die
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