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Reply #7 - Jan 4th, 2010 at 3:48pm
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I agree with nas, get right on it!
  
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Reply #6 - Jan 4th, 2010 at 1:01pm
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Hi Joe

I'm very sorry you have never experienced this pleasant anticipation but happy that you can take sustenance from mine.   

You have described your own feelings and experience so beautifully and poignantly, you could easily turn it into your own poem.

Thank you very much for sharing.
  
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Reply #5 - Jan 4th, 2010 at 7:22am
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I have not one memory of the pleasant anticipation of awaiting a parent's arrival.  I actually can only remember the dread and heart pounding adrenaline surge, I can only remember the relief when they would leave,  I remember the first night standing on my upstairs balcony, the wall sun-warmed pressing against my back, the flood of released tension and fear and joy at the realization, the complete truth that I could give to myself the happiness, security, the pleasure and comfort of HOME, that I could give to myself  the home that I always craved, that I could make it be warm and safe, that I didn't need anyone else to have that indescribable feeling of not being hunted.  So I envy and love to hear and experience other peoples lives that differed from my own.  I will never be able to write with any truth your wistful remembering, but it somehow substantiates my own experience, or lack of it.  Thank you for this glimpse into your emotional past, I need with such hunger I appreciate with total pleasure this fictional truth, not made up just crafted enough to bring the truth into focus.  Joe
  
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Reply #4 - Jan 1st, 2010 at 6:02am
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Thanks Peach

I was trying to remember what my dad smoked - woodbine I think.  Can picture the tin but not the name.
  
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Reply #3 - Jan 1st, 2010 at 2:58am
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My husband used to use CAPTAIN BLACK pipe tobacco...This piece wafted that aroma and the hominess of roasted chicken...both comfort foods--thanks
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Reply #2 - Dec 31st, 2009 at 9:19pm
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Thanks Terence, 

not a dream, more wistful remembering.  I could embellish it more but in truth, I did already as far as I felt comfortable doing.
  
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Reply #1 - Dec 31st, 2009 at 2:46pm
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Hi nas, a nicely descriptive poem to give us plenty of imagery. 

It appears to be another of those dreams of yours where, this time, the dreamer is missing the joy and comfort of their father. My only thoughts are that you could embellish it more with slippers by the fireplace, etc., but it's fine to me as-is.

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Dec 31st, 2009 at 7:01am
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Swinging back and forth
on the garden gate,
she watched the road
for his rambling stride,
wafts of smoke
curling from his pipe.

Perhaps, since it was Friday night,
a bunch of flowers in his hand,
her comic tucked in his briefcase
alongside the Daily Telegraph,
crossword half finished.

And in her dreams
he walked up the path,
taking her hand
as she skipped beside him
into the house
warm with the smell of roasted chicken
and crisp potatoes.
  
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