You're welcome...glad to have helped, enjoyed the ideas you set forth!

Consider some changes while maintaining the gist, I think?.
Consider title change...After YOU!


I wanted to hold on…

Your feelings for me, were never in question
Loving you more than I ever envisioned
But we, together, were not to be destined
Somehow we just couldn't find the right reason

They say that love can withstand any sorrow,
But one can't catch a star by standing tiptoe
Loving as we did overwhelming I know
Believe that I'm saving us letting you go

Don’t worry forever not likely to be
The duration of time for us to work free
We will manage to make it if just barely
In time, you'll see it, without the misery

Know that this was never a game or charade
It is for the best I am breaking away
A new beginning for us begins today
Good-bye, be well, now I'll be on my way

Even now halfhearted I look in your eyes
Only dusk reflected where once was sunrise 
Impossible to turn time counterclockwise
Nor can I turn back to the sound of your cries

Know as dawn paints its glow on the horizon,
The we that we've been will be over and done
Its my life to face whether you're here or gone
I lost too much of me, the more I held on.

This does feel as if it should be set to music.  Heartfelt sentiments though I wasn't too keen on:

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and you could probably lose "up" in this line

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Enjoyed the read, thanks.

Jan,
This is beautiful.  After reading this and your song I see you are a very talented poet and lyricist.
~Davidf
P.S. I'm not a stalker really...lol  I'm just a night owl who happens to log on around this time here, too.