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peach Topic Starter Supreme Member Offline I Love Cafe Poetica! Posts: 1511 Joined: Apr 21^st, 2009	Re: stellar snit Reply #8 -** Nov 5^th, 2011 at 12:59am	Print Post
	Redone to take from center format--slight tweak/ tongue in cheek piece, anyway.


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Just_Daniel Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8988 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Re: stellar snit Reply #7 - Jun 24^th, 2009 at 5:00pm	Print Post
	I certainly know a fellow-rebel, Peach! ... and I'd forgotten the time-context of your composing this, so that does make a bit of sense, and now I see the telescope-like form in your playing. deLighting in your enlightening, Daniel


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peach Topic Starter Supreme Member Offline I Love Cafe Poetica! Posts: 1511 Joined: Apr 21^st, 2009	Re: stellar snit Reply #6 - Jun 24^th, 2009 at 4:46pm	Print Post
	T'is as they say ...in the eye and ear, of the beholder=== a rebel of sorts, I'm surprised that you do not recognize a member of the variegated tribe... You may not believe it, but this was a silly, plaything, when the presidential campaigning and complaining, was going on and expanded with the financial crisis, as in you can't satisfy everyone...by hook, crook or looking skyward, for answers... The heavens just signifies that something so phenomenally beautiful, worshiped, and admired...would still complain... Then I just played some more to make it look like a telescope... It doesn't fit to any form! I'm a round peg having fallen thru a square, hole, or mayhap, slipped thru the cracks... I grin, "...haven't we all?"


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Just_Daniel Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8988 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Re: stellar snit Reply #5 - Jun 24^th, 2009 at 4:16pm	Print Post
	Sheesh, Peach... I see that you've not gotten any takers yet here. I have not been able to concentrate long enough to supply an decent critique for some time, so I've avoided being here. I notice that the other mods (on whom I've relied heavily in these forums) just haven't been able to be around much, and when that happens I feel a little helpless because of my total lack of confidence with free verse. But I'll try at least. I find this one difficult to follow, perhaps most of all because of the format, which seems arbitrary and, to quote you... unimaginative to beautiful (only an opinion) I'm not quite sure of the point of this one, but again that could be my lack of concentration. sLightly disappointed not t be of much help, Daniel


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nas Supreme Member Offline I love YaBB 1G - SP1! Posts: 9444 Joined: Sep 11^th, 2006	Re: stellar snit Reply #4 - Jun 20^th, 2009 at 4:30am	Print Post
	moved from mainline to on track as requested


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Just_Daniel Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8988 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Re: just freely written Reply #3 - May 18^th, 2009 at 5:31pm	Print Post
	to Nas, Tim, Norm or Rene... I think I just noticed Nas here a few moments ago?


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peach Topic Starter Supreme Member Offline I Love Cafe Poetica! Posts: 1511 Joined: Apr 21^st, 2009	Re: just freely written Reply #2 - May 18^th, 2009 at 5:22pm	Print Post
	do i send a pm and to any particular mod? thanks for the heads up i was just being silly with that little trinket


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Just_Daniel Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8988 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	skylights... Reply #1 - May 18^th, 2009 at 5:08pm	Print Post
	... and it's ironic that you should plop this in the 'wrong' place... because as soon as you notify one of the Mods [which I'm not in this particular forum] this piece will find itself starring in another sky! deLightingly, Daniel


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peach Topic Starter Supreme Member Offline I Love Cafe Poetica! Posts: 1511 Joined: Apr 21^st, 2009	*** stellar snit May 18^th, 2009 at 5:23am	Print Post
	Admired from every perspective by every amateur Tom, Dick and Harry, spying through their fancy telescopes, the constellations, each attached, a splendid name-- given size and shape, position in space but complain: that other stars have the ability, the liberty to shoot at will, burn up or fall from space. planets spin, seem to float weightless in their own orbit, The moon, waxes and wanes, even the clouds don't stay the same going place to place, with the weather, Constellations remain exactly as they are- fixed in the fix they're in... I grin...who isn't?
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