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peach Supreme Member Offline I Love Cafe Poetica! Posts: 1511 Joined: Apr 21^st, 2009	Re: Real Comfort Reply #13 - Jun 30^th, 2009 at 12:28pm	Print Post
	This is as near perfection as the scene you create within these few lines... My ONLY suggest would be to switch yard to garden for a softer, more poetic sound, that would do well here~p
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Just_Daniel Topic Starter Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8988 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Re: Real Comfort Reply #12 - Jun 8^th, 2009 at 9:53pm	Print Post
	Dani wrote on Apr 6^th, 2009 at 1:27am: Hello Daniel, I have been MIA for a while now and this was a lovely break back into life. I love the way you call to taking a break from your life to meditate on what happens naturally in the world around you. See nature's renewal of life. Lovely ... dani Thank you so much, Dani... and I see this is one of those pieces that may have contributed to the idea that I was ignoring you! Sorry for not being around myself for some time. I'm afraid there are a lot of ignored pieces and comments here that I may never see... for which I'm very sorry. deLighting always in seeing you, Daniel


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Just_Daniel Topic Starter Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8988 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Re: Real Comfort Reply #11 - Jun 8^th, 2009 at 9:47pm	Print Post
	writer wrote on Mar 20^th, 2009 at 4:01pm: Daniel, I've read this a couple of times and thought I'd made comment. That's what I get for thinking. My Dad always said thinking should be left to folks who know what they are doing. This is a nice piece, soft and comforting. Becky and I took a walk through the local Nature Center on Sunday last. Not a lot of wildlife out yet, but we saw signs of deer. Also saw several geese trying to navigate over a frozen pond. They could have used chains or boots with gripper soles. Wayne Wandering through here I found some unanswered comments, yours among them, Wayne. I like the thought of the implements for the geese on the pond... and can imagine your writing a poem about that! deLighting in stumbling across this, Daniel


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Dani Full Member Offline I Love Cafe Poetica! Posts: 134 Joined: Nov 15^th, 2008	Re: Real Comfort Reply #10 - Apr 6^th, 2009 at 1:27am	Print Post
	Hello Daniel, I have been MIA for a while now and this was a lovely break back into life. I love the way you call to taking a break from your life to meditate on what happens naturally in the world around you. See nature's renewal of life. Lovely ... dani


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writer Supreme Member Offline life is good! Posts: 3560 Location: Fridley, MN Joined: Nov 25^th, 2006	Re: Real Comfort Reply #9 - Mar 20^th, 2009 at 4:01pm	Print Post
	Daniel, I've read this a couple of times and thought I'd made comment. That's what I get for thinking. My Dad always said thinking should be left to folks who know what they are doing. This is a nice piece, soft and comforting. Becky and I took a walk through the local Nature Center on Sunday last. Not a lot of wildlife out yet, but we saw signs of deer. Also saw several geese trying to navigate over a frozen pond. They could have used chains or boots with gripper soles. Wayne


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Just_Daniel Topic Starter Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8988 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	theater girl... Reply #8 - Mar 20^th, 2009 at 3:15pm	Print Post
	Terri - theatrechica wrote on Mar 19^th, 2009 at 8:46pm: It is a beautiful little piece. Few words, but big sentiments. I guess I just wanted more... Greetings, Theater Girl, and welcome to Poem Train. I'm tremendously honored that your only post so far has been to my humble little poem... and what an even greater honor that you should be left wanting more. I'm extremely pleased that you like it. I don't have a whole lot more to say in this poem, but I'm sure that you can find a few more lying around here without looking too far... and the other posters here will be looking forward both to hearing from you in their posts AND to your own posting soon. deLighting in your participation, Daniel


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Just_Daniel Topic Starter Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8988 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	nas... Reply #7 - Mar 20^th, 2009 at 3:09pm	Print Post
	nas wrote on Mar 16^th, 2009 at 6:42am: It's good to get out and about in Spring after being stuck indoors all winter and see nature waking up. Yes, nature is waking up in my yard, so pretty soon we have to be about the business of planting our veggie garden (which I think one of my tenants wants to do this year. He's already rototilled if for the first time, so I'm gonna have to do it once more before my son borrows the tiller to do his first-ever veggie garden with/for his wife. They're excited to have their own yard now... and I'll have to be mowing the lawn again soon. Fortunately, I get to sit down to do most of it these days! deLighting in your reading and sharing, Daniel


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Just_Daniel Topic Starter Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8988 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	David... Reply #6 - Mar 20^th, 2009 at 3:06pm	Print Post
	davidf wrote on Mar 16^th, 2009 at 1:53am: Daniel, When I read your comment on my poem (Spring), I just had to read yours. You're definitely right, while we share the same topic, that's about where the similararties (sp.?) end... ~Davidf Your spelling is quite right, David -- except for the extra 'ar' -- which I almost missed. My dyslexic eyes do that a lot, in fact! So I guess you might say that we have similar rarities ? deLightingly, Daniel


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Terri - theatrechica Full Member Offline Everyone is broken and doing their best. Love them Posts: 111 Location: Bay Shore, NY Joined: Mar 16^th, 2009	Re: Real Comfort Reply #5 - Mar 19^th, 2009 at 8:46pm	Print Post
	It is a beautiful little piece. Few words, but big sentiments. I guess I just wanted more...


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nas Supreme Member Offline I love YaBB 1G - SP1! Posts: 9444 Joined: Sep 11^th, 2006	Re: Real Comfort Reply #4 - Mar 16^th, 2009 at 6:42am	Print Post
	It's good to get out and about in Spring after being stuck indoors all winter and see nature waking up.


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davidf Supreme Member Offline I love YaBB 1G - SP1! Posts: 1158 Joined: Oct 25^th, 2007	Re: Real Comfort Reply #3 - Mar 16^th, 2009 at 1:53am	Print Post
	Daniel, When I read your comment on my poem (Spring), I just had to read yours. You're definitely right, while we share the same topic, that's about where the similararties (sp.?) end... ~Davidf


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Just_Daniel Topic Starter Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8988 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Terry... Reply #2 - Mar 15^th, 2009 at 7:08pm	Print Post
	... and thank you for the encouragement and affirmation, Terry! deLighting in the sharing of renewal, Daniel


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Terry Gold Star Member Offline I love YaBB 1G - SP1! Posts: 628 Location: OR Joined: Feb 14^th, 2007	Re: Real Comfort Reply #1 - Mar 15^th, 2009 at 6:37pm	Print Post
	Daniel, It's true Daniel there's so much more to life, than security and creature comforts...i love taking time to rejuvinate through observation, and the renewall of natural occurences, the seasons, and seemingly new creations. thanks for the post, very much enjoyed. t


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Just_Daniel Topic Starter Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8988 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Real Comfort Mar 15^th, 2009 at 12:32pm	Print Post
	Real Comfort Come, leave the security of your home letting your coffee remain un-drunk and your lover’s cigarette un-smoked. Find the secret of the sparrows watching the renewal of forsythia in the back corner of your yard. _{© MLee Dickens'son 15 March 2009 riposte using ten words of Katha Pollitt's Small Comfort: coffee, forsythia, renewal, cigarettes, drunk, sparrows, secret, corner, home, lover}
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