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Normpo wrote on Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am:
Daniel,   

a ray of light near blinded thee near-blinded

Quite unique -- you did it without any punctuation yet I think you need that last dot at the end of "meow in S4 ~smile~

You're right!  Grin  I'll be posting a rather extensive revision that adds punctuation and capitalization.  I don't think my experiment in that regard worked as well as I'd hoped... but thanks for noticing my attempt!

I really like the old-style use of the English language every chance you got -- nice touch.  This was a wonderful way of telling us your views on clichés.  I enjoyed it all.

Thanks, Norm.  I've added some and removed some in the revision.  I'd be interested in your reaction.

Shakespeare might have said in cliché:

Don't be left hanging,
That's plain as day;
Rule of thumb:
Where there's a Will there's a way.

Fill in the blanks to complete the 4th cliché, Daniel! ~smile~ Norm

[ But capitalizing on Will makes it less cliché! 

deLightedly, Daniel ]
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jgdittier wrote on Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am:
Dear Daniel,
I'm trying to compliment you in a non-cliche method. 
I must think of something yet unsaid. 
I'm thinking...
Cheers,     Ron  jgd

I get your point, my friend!  Cleverly stated!

deLighting always in your exchanges, Daniel  8)
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Re: cliché ~ the cat's meow  (modified 5/29 ~ than
Reply #10 - Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am
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Daniel,

cliché ~ the cat's meow 
 
cliché is when what used to be 
a ray of light near blinded thee near-blinded
by stabbing through thy shadowed lid 
‘til thou couldst see what had been hid 
 
and thou couldst barely hold thy tongue 
from speaking it aloud among 
compatriots, who shared it too 
alas the phrase took wing and flew 
 
across the seas of time until 
t'was slobbered daily in the swill 
of pubs and bars and on the street 
where even urchins would repeat 
 
its flick’ring light that no one sees 
for darkness brought it to its knees 
to crawl among the vermin now 
avoided like the cat’s meow 


Quite unique -- you did it without any punctuation yet I think you need that last dot at the end of "meow in S4 ~smile~
I really like the old-style use of the English language every chance you got -- nice touch.

This was a wonderful way of telling us your views on clichés.  I enjoyed it all.

Shakespeare might have said in cliché:

Don't be left hanging,
That's plain as day;
Rule of thumb:
_____ there's a way.

Fill in the blanks to complete the 4th cliché, Daniel! ~smile


Norm
  
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Dear Daniel,
I'm trying to compliment you in a non-cliche method. 
I must think of something yet unsaid. 
I'm thinking...
Cheers,     Ron  jgd
  
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Thank you again for your nudging.  'twas nothing to spit on!

Lightly plootin', Daniel  8)
  
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Hi, my friend. 
Looks better now.

Now I don't have to think of words bounding into spittoons, etc. Yukko.

Breath mint, for sure.
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diehard wrote on Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am:
daniel, 
the poor cat.
you've said it well.

Thank you, Diane.  The cat, though avoided, still catches the vermin.  Fear not!

I got hung up, though, trying to visualize a cliche
slobbering in swill. Seems it wouldn't do that on its own.
maybe, somehow "got" slobbered (without losing the rhythm)? Surely it wouldn't self-slobber.

Point taken.  Thanks for the nudge to revise!

Just me, pulling the cat's tail.  [ Neither of ours minds much! ]

"across the seas of time until 
it slobbered daily in the swill"

I've wiped my mouth now, thank you.  I hope it wasn't offensive... and I'll take a breath mint now too.  Nothing worse than cat's breath... though my dog's ain't good, fer sher!

Lightly, Daniel  8)
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Tim wrote on Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am:
Hello Daniel, I often think that I.T. is perfect for light verse, and this proves it.

Thank you... and I think you're right on IT!

S3 is easy to see, yet S1 and S4 are the metaphorical and points to how often people use a cliche without investing in it's etymology. We just assume. 

... and as our drill sargeant used to say, To ASSUME makes an ASS out of U and ME.

The last two couplets are my favourite in this. Nicely penned, sir.  ~Tim

Thank you for contemplating with me, Tim.  Always appreciated.

deLightingly, Daniel  8)
  
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nas wrote on Jan 1st, 1970 at 12:00am:
Hi Daniel The dreaded cliche.  It's funny how what once started out as an original phrase has now become so overused that it becomes meaningless.  

Yes, the expression "the cat's meow" or "the cat's pajamas" (from pajamas made by EB Katz in late 1700's) both used to mean "something very outstanding" or the like.  "cat's whiskers" may have meant something similar where you are, but long ago it meant the wire that created a kind of diode on a crystal radio... so I purposedly ended this piece about cliché with a nearly-forgotten cliché.

Now, I'd love for a phrase I created to become a cliche, doubt it will ever happen,

Stranger things have happened.  I wouldn't be surprised.  Just keep writing!

What was once the cat's whiskers is now the cat's meow.

I'll see whether I can tickle my cat into a meow with one of the other cat's whiskers.  I know the second one will meow when I take it!

Lightly, Daniel  8)
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daniel, 
the poor cat.
you've said it well.

I got hung up, though, trying to visualize a cliche
slobbering in swill. Seems it wouldn't do that on its own.
maybe, somehow "got" slobbered (without losing the rhythm)? Surely it wouldn't self-slobber.

Just me, pulling the cat's tail.

"across the seas of time until 
it slobbered daily in the swill"
  
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Hello Daniel,

I often think that I.T. is perfect for light verse, and this proves it.

S3 is easy to see, yet S1 and S4 are the metaphorical and points to how often people use a cliche without investing in it's etymology. We just assume. 

The last two couplets are my favourite in this. Nicely penned, sir.

~Tim
  
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Hi Daniel

The dreaded cliche.  It's funny how what once started out as an original phrase has now become so overused that it becomes meaningless.   

Now, I'd love for a phrase I created to become a cliche, doubt it will ever happen,

What was once the cat's whiskers is now the cat's meow.
  
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cliché ~ the cat's meow

cliché is when what came to be
a ray of light, half-blinded thee
by stabbing ‘neath thy shadowed lid;
soon thou couldst grasp a tail once hid...

With 'Cat's Pajamas' on thy tongue
thou'd spread it forth with joy among
compatriots, who’d shout it too.
Alack, thy phrase took wing and flew...

across the seas of time until
t'was slobbered daily in the swill
of pubs and bars and on the street
where even urchins would repeat

its flick’ring light, near no one sees...
for grey has brought it to its knees
to crawl among the vermin now,
avoided like the cat’s meow.

© MLee Dickens'son 23 May 2007

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cliché is when what used to be
a ray of light near blinded thee
by stabbing through thy shadowed lid
‘til thou couldst see what had been hid

and thou couldst barely hold thy tongue
from speaking it aloud among
compatriots, who shared it too
alas the phrase took wing and flew

across the seas of time until
t'was slobbered daily in the swill
of pubs and bars and on the street
where even urchins would repeat

its flick’ring light that no one sees
for darkness brought it to its knees
to crawl among the vermin now
avoided like the cat’s meow


Original:
S3L2 ~ it slobbered daily in the swill
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