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Re: Cinquain ~ FOM June 07
Reply #28 - Oct 9th, 2012 at 2:09am
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                                             Kiss me
                                        In the moonlight
                                Bathe in the moon's essence
                                    We'll be together forever
                                             Us two

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Reply #27 - Dec 1st, 2008 at 9:35pm
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cinquains
from our Poppy
and from Merrimuse sing
over against Just_Daniel's throat
croaking
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Re: Cinquain ~ FOM June 07
Reply #26 - Nov 30th, 2008 at 11:25pm
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I'll try another cinquain.


Closeness
is difficult
to manage from afar.
When handled with love and prayer,
succeeds.


I like such short forms ... perhaps because I'm so short?   Undecided

Dolly   Smiley
  
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And one more just because ...
Reply #25 - Nov 21st, 2008 at 10:42pm
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"Of words" 
rings through my blood 
even if ignored 
they will come tumbling out onto 
the page


Dolly    Roll Eyes
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I used to read and write these ... I'll try again
Reply #24 - Nov 21st, 2008 at 10:36pm
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Don specks 
at beginning 
of day or when using 
computer--life makes adjustments 
that stick


Dolly   Wink
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Re: Cinquain ~ FOM June 07
Reply #23 - Sep 20th, 2008 at 9:05pm
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The Cinquain is my favorite form (in case y'all didn't know).  Here are a few from my personal archives.



Migration 

The geese
on winter’s eve, 
with no warm resting place,
leave the cold lake, and trustingly
fly south.



One Flame

One flame
alone can keep
back the frost, and deny
darkness when time tries to snuff the
last spark.



Memories

On small 
noiseless feet they 
come from cold, dark rooms of 
our home to sun themselves on the 
doorstep.



Truth

Truth is
man’s great secret,
the only absolute,
and to all questions, the only
answer.



Cinquain for Samantha

She was 
born in silence, 
but her gentle heartbeats
will forever whisper within 
my soul.

  
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Reply #22 - Jun 21st, 2007 at 5:10pm
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smileys
arranged in rows
aiming at the heavens...
how better could it be described?
cinquain
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Re: Cinquains ~ FOM June 07
Reply #21 - Jun 21st, 2007 at 4:15pm
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Ladygrace wrote on Jun 21st, 2007 at 8:02am:
 Smiley Wink
Shocked Cool Roll Eyes Tongue
Smiley Smiley Wink Wink Roll Eyes Roll Eyes
Tongue Lips Sealed Lips Sealed Cheesy Wink Smiley Sad Shocked
Kiss Kiss


ha-ha. I think you should publish this with a title that refers to it being a cinquain; I like it!

~Tim
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Re: Cinquains ~ FOM June 07
Reply #20 - Jun 21st, 2007 at 8:02am
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diehard wrote on Jun 20th, 2007 at 1:53am:
Smiley


DH...  I believe the proper cinquain would go something like this:
 
 Smiley Wink
Shocked Cool Roll Eyes Tongue
Smiley Smiley Wink Wink Roll Eyes Roll Eyes
Tongue Lips Sealed Lips Sealed Cheesy Wink Smiley Sad Shocked
Kiss Kiss


LOL!
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Re: Cinquains ~ FOM June 07
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Reply #18 - Jun 20th, 2007 at 1:29am
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she thought
she couldn't write
cinquains until one day
she gathered up fine twigs to weave
her nest
  
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Re: Cinquains ~ FOM June 07
Reply #17 - Jun 19th, 2007 at 7:19pm
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three cinquains, in an effort to learn the form

Tears

She had
no fear of death.
But letting go of life
brought such a sadness to her heart,
she wept.

© Carver Adams 06/07



It’s There

The joy’s
between the lines
of our experience,
and, only if we read to know,
discerned.

© Carver Adams 06/07


Surprise

I thought
blue jays did not
make nests until one day 
I saw a pair collecting twigs
to build.

© Carver Adams 06/07
  
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un-covered
Reply #16 - Jun 10th, 2007 at 7:41pm
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Extemely thought-provoking, Tim!  Thank you for the reminder to all of us...

so I'll further some thoughts on the subject:

un-covered

picture
yourself alone
nowhere to lay your head
nameless in a sea of roofless
people

away
from souls who care
hidden from those who don't
unreachable by those who could
for now

© MLee Dickens'son 10 June 2007
  
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Re: Cinquains ~ FOM June 07
Reply #15 - Jun 9th, 2007 at 7:50pm
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Homeless


Cardboard,
strewn and broken
down--like a rummage sale
all over--in alleys they sit,
alone.
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fledgling rictameter ?
Reply #14 - Jun 1st, 2007 at 3:40pm
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fledgling rictameter?

cinquain 
seems a fledgling 
poem trying its wings... 
young rictameter-in-training 
takes off


© MLee Dickens'son 01 June 2007
  
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