Wasn't ignorin' ya, Norm.  Jes' didn't see yer response.  This isn't a new one, but I did a bit of revision before I posted it on another site, so I thought I'd post it here as well, since I'd not done so before.  I wrote it a couple of years ago; I just added the original date, though it was revised last month.  

My favorite, however is my Purple Owl piece above, even though it isn't really a paradelle.   I'd made a mistake on that one, playing with different line lengths, so I just added an excra stanza to use all the words.   Didn't wanna just toss it!  

stammerin' Lightly, Daniel  8)

averse in silence

He sits here all alone
he sits here all alone
and stares upon his verse
and stares upon his verse
Alone he stares upon 
all verse… and here his sits

No one to read it back
no one to read it back
but Silence, squirming now
but Silence, squirming now
Butt-squirming silence reads
it back to no one now

It does not make much sense
it does not make much sense
yet who would e’er know so
yet who would e’er know so
Whoe’er makes so much sense
could know it, yet does not

No squirming now would make
his stares to read it back
and he who does so much
knows silence, e’er alone
All sense upon butt sits
It hears not one verse yet

© MLee Dickens'son 27 Nov 2004

Daniel

That was amazing and FAST

It took me days to fine tune mine.  And, you know how I struggle with these strict forms anyway -- I'm too much of a rebel to be squished into some mold I guess.

Thanks for trying one and tossing it out here for us to enjoy!

Mary

P.S.  Notification systems are still down -- I know you rely no those with your busy schedule.  Hopefully the host will get the upgrade on their mailserver completed soon.

Paradelle

The paradelle is a very difficiult French form of poetry that has very strict repetition throughout the poem.

There are a total of four 6-line stanzas, with the last stanza being a summation of all that come before it.  

Set up for the first three stanzas:

Line one --  a new line
Line two -- repeat line one
Line three -- a new line
Line four -- repeat line three
Lines five and six -- use all of the words from lines one and three.

Set up for Final stanza --

Use all of the words contained in the first three stanzas.


I've found them quite a challange to write.  Here is one of mine as an example, color-coded for you to follow the set-up:


A Paradelle of Winged Flight

Twilight falls, darkness cover me
Twilight falls, darkness cover me
as gentle slumber lures awakening dreams
as gentle slumber lures awakening dreams
cover me gentle twilight, darkness lures dreams,
awakening, as slumber falls. 

Journey on celelstial wings through astral visions
Journey on celelstial wings through astral visions
and hover above earth-bound limitations
and hover above earth-bound limitations
on celestial wings, hover above earth bound limitations
and journey through astral visions.

Explore the expansiveness of self,
Explore the expansiveness of self, 
look within and discover your untapped wealth
look within and discover your untapped wealth
look within the expansiveness of self,
discover and explore your untapped wealth.

cover me, dreams look within darkness 
journey -- discover your gentle awakening;
slumber lures the expansiveness of self 
through astral visions.  Hover above 
earthbound limitations on celestial wings, 
and as twilight falls, explore wealth -- untapped.

Copyright © 2003 Mary Ellen Clark